One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that a lot of constructions,

such

as buildings and offices are now built with an

open-space

design.

While

it can be argued that having constructions built with an

open-space

design is beneficial, I still believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, and

this

is a negative development. There are two main reasons why people might believe that

this

is a positive development.

Firstly

, the relationships between

employees

might be better.

This

is because working in an

open-space

area brings

employees

closer together physically, breaking down the invisible wall between people.

As a result

,

employees

can interact with their colleagues more easily, making it more approachable.

Lastly

, it might have positive effects on the collaboration between colleagues. As

employees

are

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closer together, they have better communication and interaction with each other.

This

benefits

employees

with a better flow of information, resulting in better management for managers. Despite the above arguments, I still believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

Firstly

, working together in an

open-space

area might lead to

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lack of privacy. Since workers sit

closely

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to each other,

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of their actions might be observed by their colleagues. Sometimes, work is sensitive, and being able to see everyone’s screen might be disruptive.

Secondly

, working in an

open- plan

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area might lead to greater distractions. Working close to each other without walls to separate people can be noisy and chaotic, especially in call

centers

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.

This

results in the fact that

employees

can’t focus on their work, decreasing their efficiency.

Lastly

, it might end up

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a higher risk of diseases spreading.

This

is because

employees

work fairly close to each other, so the chance of an infectious disease spreading might be very high. In conclusion,

while

there are benefits of open-plan design, I still believe that

this

is a negative development, and the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.