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In many countries’ schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, there have been serious issues regarding the behaviour of
students
 in schools. In
this
 essay, I will give my opinion on the causes of those problems that have an impact on their behaviour and I will provide my suggestions for solving
this
 point.
Firstly
, the main point of problem that causes trouble for
students
 is the lack of competent teachers.
In other words
, the lack of capable professors can cause damage to the learning process of their
students
.
For instance
, teachers who are incompetent and do not know how to teach
students
 usually make a lot of mistakes and do not explain a vivid picture of study materials or provide useful suggestions to them.
In contrast
, if teachers are experts and knowledgeable, those problems, which
students
 may be faced with, can be easily solved and explained to the
students
 who do not understand those points clearly.
However
, I believe that lacking competent professors can be resolved by using a lot of funding in order to attract capable professors to work with.
Secondly
, the secondary problem of student attitude is the lack of technologies or facilities for
students
 while they are studying.
For example
, insufficient technologies and facilities during studying or after studying can cause a bad impact on the approach to teaching the student because sometimes lacking technologies and facilities may affect
students
 on the way of accessing good study materials or others.
Nevertheless
, I think that
this
 point can be resolved by finding another way of teaching. In conclusion, Many states confront the issues of student attitude in school,
however
, I think that
this
 problem can be solved in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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