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Unemployment is getting increasingly serious in many countries. Some people think students only need to get primary education, while others think secondary education is necessary. Discuss both views and opine.

Unemployment is the biggest issue in many Countries. Some
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 believe that primary teaching reveals all problems but others think that secondary schooling is more beneficial for students.
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 shall discuss both views in my upcoming paragraph with a crystal clear conclusion. On the one hand, a big proportion of society considers that primary
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 is sufficient for every student they think that if the person has primary learning, they can find a
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 easily. Nowadays competition for jobs is actually tough because there are more and more
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 seekers so demos think that primary study saves their time and they think higher training does not provide practical techniques for factory work so it is unnecessary for students. For ,example in many ,countries there is only primary literacy because they think primary science is more lucrative than secondary teaching.
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 primary learning is the easiest way to get a
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 future.
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, there are many reasons why people believe that primary information is insufficient because secondary
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 gives them more opportunities for getting a better
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.
Secondary level
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 teaching is very valuable for every person but it increases their knowledge level and every student
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 top level
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. If all youngsters have good
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 skills, they can beat every difficult situation and they will be able to reduce unemployment.
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 secondary
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 is a very important part without it student can not achieve their life goals. To sum up,
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 I believe that primary teaching is sufficient
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 a few kinds of work secondary
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 more powerful than primary
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 they can get any position and they do not any type of
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 secondary
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 a vital role in their future.

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