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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 contemporary world, due to the advancement of technology and
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 which lead to climate change it is evident that survival on Earth is not possible
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long
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 term, so it is crucial to explore other planets of
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However
, few individuals consider the expenses
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such
 research to be beneficial. The protagonist
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 on Earth is not possible for a long
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, and in order to
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 the increased number of humans, trees have to be chopped down.
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it is widely known that the Ozone hole over Australia is expanding due to
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 increase in the pollution level which is mostly caused by
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 or by the forest fire that
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climate change. To encapsulate, I opine that, the money
that is
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research
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 of life on other planets is certainly a progressive approach as it will lead to the
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 race.
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