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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent to you agree with this veiw?

#people #government #money #arts #eleswhere #veiw
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Maintaining
museums
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, which require bundles' of
money
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, might be fruitful for gaining knowledge for
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next
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 generation;
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, it is believed by a few masses that utilising funds on the art galleries is not worth it, might be superior to spending on other sectors. I,
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, agree with
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 statement
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up to
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up to
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 extent and will explain
reasons
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the reasons
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 for it. To commence with, there are numerous
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reasons
reasona
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reasons
whichsupport
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which support
which supports
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 idea, perhaps the prominent one is " free
education
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 to youths" To put it simply, if the policymakers invest funds
on
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 providing
education
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 at zero cost, it will help to enhance the literacy rate in the country, because, educations' are highly expensive and
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, humans not get proper academic knowledge. Japan could be an ideal example here, they enhance the literacy rate in their nation by giving free high school and university
education
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.
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, spending
money
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 on
education
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 would be benefited for nation more than
museums
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. Another reason that
worth
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 mentioning here is,
"construction
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the "construction
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 of
roads
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" To elaborate
it
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apply
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, since
traffic
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 congestion become
major
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 issue in urban areas, constructing
roads
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 not only solve
traffic
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 bottleneck but
also
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 save human lives
who
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lost
his
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their
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 life in
road
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 accident.
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, in
India
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,India
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 the local authorities spent
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the majority
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 of taxation
money
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 on improving
roads
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 and
that is
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 the reason their citizens face
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traffic
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 jams problem as
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 to other nations.
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, in order to control
traffic
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issue
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,
the
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lawmakers should utilise
money
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 on highway construction. On the flip side, despite Investing
huge
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a huge
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 chunk of
money
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 in
museums
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, it is benefits cannot be overlooked. " provide knowledge about history" painting and sculpture are fruitful to learn about history
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 as ancient civilisation
,
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 when the government invest
money
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 to well maintain for
next
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 generation.
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, utilising
money
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 on art
gallaries
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galleries
 could be beneficial for maintaining old historical products. To conclude,
although
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 spending
money
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 on
museums
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 is beneficial in terms of maintaining old historical items, if the authority accesses these funds on constructing
roads
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 and providing free
education
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, it will be more beneficial.
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