Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent to you agree with this veiw?

Maintaining
museums
, which require bundles' of
money
, might be fruitful for gaining knowledge for
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generation;
nevertheless
, it is believed by a few masses that utilising funds on the art galleries is not worth it, might be superior to spending on other sectors. I,
however
, agree with
this
statement
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extent and will explain
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the reasons
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for it. To commence with, there are numerous
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reasons
reasona
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reasons
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which support
which supports
this
idea, perhaps the prominent one is " free
education
to youths" To put it simply, if the policymakers invest funds
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providing
education
at zero cost, it will help to enhance the literacy rate in the country, because, educations' are highly expensive and
therefore
, humans not get proper academic knowledge. Japan could be an ideal example here, they enhance the literacy rate in their nation by giving free high school and university
education
.
As a result
, spending
money
on
education
would be benefited for nation more than
museums
. Another reason that
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mentioning here is,
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of
roads
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, since
traffic
congestion become
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issue in urban areas, constructing
roads
not only solve
traffic
bottleneck but
also
save human lives
who
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lost
his
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life in
road
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accident.
For example
, in
India
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,India
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the local authorities spent
majority
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the majority
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of taxation
money
on improving
roads
and
that is
the reason their citizens face
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traffic
jams problem as
compare
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to other nations.
Hence
, in order to control
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,
the
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lawmakers should utilise
money
on highway construction. On the flip side, despite Investing
huge
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chunk of
money
in
museums
, it is benefits cannot be overlooked. " provide knowledge about history" painting and sculpture are fruitful to learn about history
such
as ancient civilisation
,
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when the government invest
money
to well maintain for
next
generation.
Therefore
, utilising
money
on art
gallaries
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galleries
could be beneficial for maintaining old historical products. To conclude,
although
spending
money
on
museums
is beneficial in terms of maintaining old historical items, if the authority accesses these funds on constructing
roads
and providing free
education
, it will be more beneficial.
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