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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent to you agree with this veiw?

Maintaining
museums
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, which require bundles' of
money
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, might be fruitful for gaining knowledge for
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 generation;
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, it is believed by a few masses that utilising funds on the art galleries is not worth it, might be superior to spending on other sectors. I,
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, agree with
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 extent and will explain
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the reasons
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 for it. To commence with, there are numerous
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reasons
reasona
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reasons
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which support
which supports
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 idea, perhaps the prominent one is " free
education
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 to youths" To put it simply, if the policymakers invest funds
on
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 providing
education
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 at zero cost, it will help to enhance the literacy rate in the country, because, educations' are highly expensive and
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, humans not get proper academic knowledge. Japan could be an ideal example here, they enhance the literacy rate in their nation by giving free high school and university
education
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.
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, spending
money
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 on
education
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 would be benefited for nation more than
museums
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. Another reason that
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 mentioning here is,
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the "construction
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 of
roads
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" To elaborate
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, since
traffic
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 congestion become
major
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 issue in urban areas, constructing
roads
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 not only solve
traffic
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 bottleneck but
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 save human lives
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lost
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their
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 life in
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 accident.
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, in
India
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 the local authorities spent
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 of taxation
money
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 on improving
roads
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 and
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 the reason their citizens face
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traffic
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 jams problem as
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 to other nations.
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, in order to control
traffic
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,
the
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lawmakers should utilise
money
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 on highway construction. On the flip side, despite Investing
huge
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 chunk of
money
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 in
museums
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, it is benefits cannot be overlooked. " provide knowledge about history" painting and sculpture are fruitful to learn about history
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 as ancient civilisation
,
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 when the government invest
money
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 to well maintain for
next
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 generation.
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, utilising
money
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 on art
gallaries
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galleries
 could be beneficial for maintaining old historical products. To conclude,
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 spending
money
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 on
museums
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 is beneficial in terms of maintaining old historical items, if the authority accesses these funds on constructing
roads
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 and providing free
education
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, it will be more beneficial.

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