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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of museum is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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It is undeniable that
museums
 are places that are full of
knowledge
 and full of
history
. Some
people
 believe that
museums
 are
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places for fun
however
, some
people
 think that the purpose of
museums
 is to educate. In my opinion,
museums
 are the places, which enhance our
knowledge
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 their diversity and
also
 educate us. I think
this
 way for two reasons, which I will explore in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the diversity, which we used to see in a museum is incredible. Placement of different cultures depiction at one
place
 in itself is an outstanding notion, which helps us to know about the
history
 of many things around the world. My own personal experience is a compelling example of
this
, as in my final semester I have to submit a project on ancient culture in the college. I found the museum, the best
place
 to do my research work on the
history
 project. It helped me to understand the ancient culture and
people
 very easily.
Hence
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Furthermore
, some activities in
museums
 are very much attractive for the children
such
 as short movies to enhance their
knowledge
 with high-quality sound. For ,kids
this
 will
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learning with fun, and they feel motivated to go there again and again. Some displays are
also
 very attractive with lights and sound both for
knowledge
 and entertainment. In conclusion, I believe that
museums
 are the best
place
 to know about our
history
, culture, and
people
 of a particular time or era. Everyone should have a visit to
such
 a knowledgeable
place
 and children must see them both for fun activities and for the
knowledge
.
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