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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

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It is widely recognized that
transport
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 system plays
an
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 crucial role in today's modern society. Many people assume that the best way to improve transportation is to invest money
on
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 roads and motorways, while some others are more inclined to spend money on public
transport
 systems. In my opinion, I think it would be best to accomplish both of them, and the following essay will discuss
in
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 detail. On the one hand, the investigation
in
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 road quality can temporarily fix the problems which relate to
transport
 problems.
Firstly
,
such
 improvements will give
the
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 sense of security and safety
toward
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 those who
participating
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 in transportation.
Besides
, it
also
 improves the overall appearance of the city and the experience of passengers.
For example
, cities which have
a developed road systems
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a developed road system
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 will have extra
point
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 in
tourist's
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tourists'
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 eyes.
On the other hand
, I suppose that the investigation
in
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 public
transport
 systems would be a
permanently
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 solution. The reason behind
this
is
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that is
 pretty simple. To be specific, public means of
transport
 play an
importance
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 role in controlling
the
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apply
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traffic congestion and pollution. In detail, the use of public transportation will reduce the levels of air pollution and soil erosion thanks to the shrinkage of fumes and fossil fuels.
Besides
, it
also
 can reduce traffic jams and the overused of private means of
transport
 because it is a viable alternative
of
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 motorbikes and cars because it is much cheaper and versatile. In conclusion, I believe that it would be the best option
is
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to utilize
public
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the public
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transport
 system and the improvement in roads and motorways and both of them are very important because
it
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they
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 might tackle all of the
transport
 issues. And I think every
countries
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country
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 should put a lot of
efforts
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effort
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improving
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into improving
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such
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transport
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a trasport
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trasport
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transport
 system.
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