Even though doctors advise old people to get more exercise many old people do not get enough. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions for this?

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
sedentary lifestyle
motivation
physical limitations
lack of time
fear of injury
exercise facilities
misunderstanding
benefits of exercise
social support
poor health conditions
awareness
appropriate exercises
guidance
financial constraints

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Even though doctors advise old people to get more exercise many old people do not get enough. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions for this?

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Many people believe money is a very important factor for achieving happiness. Others, however believe that money has nothing to do with happiness. Discuss both views.

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think re the causes of this? What effects will have on society?

Some people think that the most important function of music is to help people reduce stress.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the debate over whether school uniforms should be compulsory gets intense, it has become a matter of concern whether people should stick to this traditional way of uniforms or seek alternative solutions.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can indeed pose both social and practical challenges. Do you agree or disagree?