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Nowadays more and more people have access to the Internet. But constant availability of any information worsens people's memory and critical thinking skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to the advancement of technology,
people
 tend to use the
internet
 to search for information. Some
people
 state that it will negatively affect
people’s
 memory and critical thinking
skills
,
this
 essay totally
agree
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 with
this
 statement. It is
first
 considered that
access
 to
internet
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the internet
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 will worsen
people’s
 memory. With
computer
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computers
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 and
smartphone
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smartphones
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,
people
 do not have to jot down notes during lessons as they will be able to find
those information
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that information
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 online. In a long term,
people
 will not memorize things as well as
the
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 past, it is due to the lack of usage of the function of remembering and recalling from the brain. If
people
 do not have
access
 to the
internet
, they will have to remember everything they are interested in as it is difficult to find it back once they forget it.
Additionally
, it will worsen
people’s
 critical thinking
skills
.
People
 can get
access
 to all kinds of knowledge with the
access
 of
internet
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the internet
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,
this
 causes them not
thinking
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 by themselves when they face
problems
. To illustrate, when they face difficulties in answering some questions of their homework, they will not tackle the
problems
steps
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step
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 by
steps
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such
 as linking ideas together, figuring out errors and
approach
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problems
 consistently, while
this
 will gradually train
people’s
 critical thinking
skills
.
However
, with online resources, they do not have to think about how to deal with those
problems
, all they have to do is search
solving
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 methods online.
As a result
, they cannot train their critical thinking
skills
 in their daily lives. To conclude,
although
internet
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the internet
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 has many advantages
such
 as
allow
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allowing
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people
 to learn different information, it may worsen
people
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is
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in
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 different ways
such
 as memory and critical thinking
skills
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminishes
  • shallow processing
  • critical evaluation
  • misinformation
  • unprecedented
  • discerningly
  • intellectual laziness
  • interactive content
  • problem-solving
  • actively engaged
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