Higher education can be funded in several ways including the following three: 1. All costs are paid by government. 2. All costs are paid by the student. 3. All costs are paid by the student using loans from the government that must be replaid after graduation. Discuss the benefits of each option. Which is the best one?

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provides several methods to
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higher
education
costs
. One method is to offer
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their fees on behalf of bureaucracy;
conversely
, another process is
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should bear
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.
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option is
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costs
using
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from
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which have to return
students
during their work period. I shall discuss the necessity of every process. I think that among them,
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option is best for
students
and
nations
.
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with, those governments
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provide
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education
costs
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their
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beneficial for each individual
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and
also
for society.
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more easy
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the people of the nation
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when their governments give their tertiary educations fees
as a result
students
can not find any tenacious conditions related to
money
during their
study
period which
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them to concentrate more on
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.
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has
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to prosper their personal life.
Moreover
, when more people
are become
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educative in a community,
this
enrich
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the lifestyle of society and makes a nation
developed
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.
For example
, if administrators take the responsibilities of
education
systems that means the group of indigent people can
also
get the opportunity of
education
resulting in they can improve their personal and community conditions.
Therefore
, the more easy
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system a
country
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, the higher their people’s personal and social life will be.
On the other hand
,
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country
where
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students
studnets
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students
bear
their
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expense of university studying is beneficial for the
nations
.
Students
are taking
their
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action of their tertiary
study
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means governments can save a huge amount of
money
from their annual budget by which they can improve
a countries
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other infrastructure and use
this
money
in other sectors
such
as agriculture field, Export and Import business, Nuclear field,
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Research
division and so on resulting in the
nations
can rise their value towards the world which makes a
country
more prosperous.
For instance
, some countries are developing continuously and many
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people
peope
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people
say that the main reason behind their prosperity is
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that their
students
take their
education
liabilities.
Hence
, it will
more
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useful to a
country
, if their
students
paid their
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study
costs
Furthermore
, there
other
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are other
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methods which I think
more
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beneficial is when administrations offer
loan
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to their
students
to bear their
third level
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education
expenditures and after completing their graduation, they back it to their authority because
this
method can not create any burden on
students
, their family and bureaucracy as well.
Students
and their families
have
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not to
di
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any pressure about
university’s
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education
costs
. They can easily continue their
study
and after completing their graduation when they are doing
jod
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good
,
this
time they return the
money
to the authorities and authority can use it on their other needs which has
make
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every journey
easir
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easier
. To illustrate, industrialised countries like
USA
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, UK,
Australia
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and Australia
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us
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this
process
on
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their
education
field which make them the highest educative
country
. For
this
reason, I think that it will be beneficial for every
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.  In conclusion,
education
costs
of tertiary can be funded in many ways. Each
nations
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have
their
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personal procedure to complete it. There are three methods among them I think
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one is better.
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  • financial background
  • educated workforce
  • social equality
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  • government expenditure
  • sense of responsibility
  • financial stake
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