Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

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unavoidable in today’s
society
. There are few
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that capital punishment is advisable for a person who commits
dangerous
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crime
.
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, others believe that it is not advisable in
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today's
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society
. In my opinion, we don’t have
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rights
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to take other
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lives and innocent
people
might get
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. Certainly, the primary merit of
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penalty is to reduce the
crime
rate. It is increasing on daily basis, and it must be controlled by the government.
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by the police department at my location to bring fear in criminals from committing crimes.
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, it makes
people
secure.
People
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safety is essential for the country and
this
kind of
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will make
people
to
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feel safe and secure. The death penalty is important to create
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society
. On other hand,
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capital punishment might affect the life an innocent
people
. In today’s
society
, punishment is not given to a person who commits a
crime
. There are
people
who surrender
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money on behalf of other
people
.
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, my friend
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for an unknown criminal record on him for money.
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, the government must value the life of
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. It is a gift from God and we don’t have
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rights
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to take it away. The death penalty is not always
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right solution for a
crime
. To conclude, even though,
the
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crime
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lesser as a
human-being
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human being
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the government must look
in
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the reason for
crime
as well as the value of
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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