Some people say the most important thing about being rich is helping other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Some
people
argue that the most significant of being wealthy is the opportunity that it provides to lend a hand and help the needy.
However
, I disagree with the statement because not only the rich can help
people
but
also
every
people
can reach out and support different
situation
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people
.
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, being rich
people
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person

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is not fully fulfilling to
assistance
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the service to contribute the poor
people
such
as medical care “
blood
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or blood

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donate’. The benefits of donating
blood
include helping
people
injured in accidents, undergoing cancer treatment, and battling
blood
diseases, among other reasons.
However
, financial
aids
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aid

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may not fully satisfy their needs, some poor
people
more
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eager
blood
to save their life. Many wealthy individuals do not take the effort to learn what impoverished
people
want. They may not need money even only one piece of
blood
. To sum up, leading
blood
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to donate

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donate
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donation

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can
sharing
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and
saving
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a life overweigh worthy to donate money.
In addition
, not only the rich can help other
people
but
also
those from middle-to-income classes can
do
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.
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, Mother Teresa, who was fully supportive of poor
people
in the world,
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were
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helping them not in terms of financial
aids
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aid

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, but in terms of love.
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,
the
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poor
people
need medical care badly in case of
any
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earthquakes.
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deliver
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the
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food after the war place is equally claimed overweigh to the rich.
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,
give
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giving

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more love for a hug and
give
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time to be with them is
the
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a

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significant part of
the
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helping poor
people
. In conclusion, there is no relative between a person’s financial situation and
their
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they are

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not
understand
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understanding

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to help others.
Also
, love and accompany can give
anytime
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Hence
, I opined believe being rich is not the ability to help others.
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