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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and joining universities. What are the advantages or disadvantages

#year #school #universities
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Of late, it has become increasingly popular among
students
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 to take a
gap
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year
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 after finishing high
school
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.
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 practice enables them to relax and have fun with friends or family. During
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 period they can
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 travel or learn new things.
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, in my opinion, taking a break after high
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 and before joining the academy does have some drawbacks. The biggest advantage of taking a
gap
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 is pupils get an opportunity to relax and learn some valuable life lessons during
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 period. In high
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 pupils are under tremendous pressure to get high scores.
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, they have to study for prolonged hours, complete numerous assignments and spend many sleepless nights.
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, a cousin of mine who took her high
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 public exam
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year
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 was always occupied with her
studies
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, tuition and record tasks. She rarely went to bed before midnight.
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, she stayed away from family events or parties for the whole
year
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. Obviously,
students
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 take great pains to perform well in their exams and they deserve a crack after high
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. During
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 period they can travel or find a part-time job that enables them to learn new skills that might help them in the future. Travelling or working part-time will
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 give them an idea of what to expect when they have to travel for work or
studies
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 in the future. On the flip side, taking a hole from
studies
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 can have some negative effects. To start with, many
students
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 will simply waste
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 time doing nothing useful. Another disadvantage is that when
students
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 take a hole, they may lose interest in their
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. Actually, many of them will never go to an academy.
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, because of
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 discontinuity
students
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 may forget many concepts they learned at the institute.
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, when they join educational institutions they will have to task doubly hard. To conclude, taking a
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year
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 after high
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 is only beneficial for those
students
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 who use that time to engage in something productive. Those who take
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gap
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 to relax and have fun will have to perform harder when they join university after a
year
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. Worse, some of them may never join educational institutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal growth
  • academic performance
  • career exploration
  • cultural exposure
  • academic momentum
  • financial implications
  • peer separation
  • higher education
  • maturity
  • independence
  • self-understanding
  • reinvigorate
  • career paths
  • internships
  • globalized
  • structured learning
  • study habits
  • earning potential
  • social integration
  • non-academic
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