It is said that watching TV is a waste of time for children. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, spending

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watching

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becomes

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a part of the daily routine almost of

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human, and kids aren't an exception to

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trend. It is often suggested that spending

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is absolutely useless for children. But I strongly disagree with

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point of view, as I believe that in the long run, it helps them to learn the human life. First of all, it goes without saying that not all of

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TV-programs

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are well made when some of them

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as talk shows about relationships don't make any sense.

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, a plethora of series liked by children and teenagers is

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streamed on

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. Especially series helps people to collect some experience on things that

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never happened to them before. Unless they couldn't go through the shown situation by themselves, they can see some consequences come out, which helps them to learn

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life and

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them a chance to improve their behaviour patterns.

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, if someone as a kid would see in

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a TV

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series that his most liked character has a car accident because he drove too fast, he will remember it forever and never will do the same.

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, generally, it is very important to give rest

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brains

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after work or school. Even if you would watch something useless, it is a perfect way to relax. I know, how good

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method of relaxation works from my own example, as it was practised in my school every day in the

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lesson before we went home to do homework. On the one hand, the most of parents were absolutely angry about

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obligatory relaxation, but

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, they were astonished by our perfect marks. In conclusion,

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spending

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has some drawbacks, it is clear, that it could bring a huge contribution to kids' lives. I would argue, that the most important is to find a balance between losing the whole free

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and the positive effect of

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Logical structure

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Varied vocabulary

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