Many people think that increasing business and cultural relationship between different countries is positive development. Others believe that this might be reason of loss of national identities of the country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days communication between
countries
around the world continues in increasing. so, Some people are convinced that increasing business and cultural relationships between several
countries
is a positive development, while others believe that
this
might be a reason
of
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loss
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the loss

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of national identities of the
countries
.
This
essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, worrying about the actual culture of the country from changing because of the relationships with other
countries
.
for example
, Dealt between a couple of
countries
will be entered another culture for the
first
country and there is no guarantee whether
this
new culture is good and appropriate for the society of
this
country or not.
However
, some people don’t want any weird thing to come
to
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their
home
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. So that’s why these people think that their governments and
countries
shouldn’t make communicate with adjacent
countries
.
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