Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What kind of consequences could this style of parenting have on children as they get older?

Some guardians purchase their youngsters whatever they requested
for
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, as well as
freedom
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the freedom

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to do anything.
This
is not the best way of raising
children
as there are several consequences that can emerge from it during their old
age
. Every parent
want
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to raise a
well behaved
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well-behaved

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child according to societal norms. To expatiate
further
,
children
who are well disciplined bring
good
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a good

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name
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and
reputation
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to their guardians
instead
of shame and reproach.
For
instance
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children
who are being pampered and given everything they seek
for
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and
also
allowed to do whatever they want have the tendency to bring disgrace to their family and society at large, as they will not be able to withstand some eventualities when there occur.
Therefore
, parents should limit what they give to their youngsters when being requested
for
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, and
also
set boundaries for things to be done and things they should not do.
Consequently
, inappropriate discipline
to
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of

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children
can affect their
behavior
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as they grow. To elucidate
further
, anxiety is one of the consequences of unnecessary
freedom
at
young
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a young

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age
, which will affect the individual in future when working in a company
that
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where

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total
freedom
is restricted.
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Further more
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, depression can occur in the life of an individual who is used to getting everything on
a
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silver
of
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platter. When face with challenges of life while growing up, they tend to be withdrawn as they
are not use
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to suffering at their younger
age
.
Hence
guardians should be aware of these effects in other to give proper training to their youngsters. In conclusion, the best way to
nuture
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nurture

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children
is not by giving them all they ask for, and unlimited
freedom
as some consequences like anxiety and depression may set in during their later
age
.
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