Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What kind of consequences could this style of parenting have on children as they get older?

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Some guardians purchase their youngsters whatever they requested

for

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to do anything.

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children

as there are several consequences that can emerge from it during their old

age

. Every parent

want

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to raise a

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child according to societal norms. To expatiate

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children

who are well disciplined bring

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name

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to their guardians

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of shame and reproach.

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children

who are being pampered and given everything they seek

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allowed to do whatever they want have the tendency to bring disgrace to their family and society at large, as they will not be able to withstand some eventualities when there occur.

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, parents should limit what they give to their youngsters when being requested

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set boundaries for things to be done and things they should not do.

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children

can affect their

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as they grow. To elucidate

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, anxiety is one of the consequences of unnecessary

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total

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, depression can occur in the life of an individual who is used to getting everything on

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platter. When face with challenges of life while growing up, they tend to be withdrawn as they

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to suffering at their younger

age

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guardians should be aware of these effects in other to give proper training to their youngsters. In conclusion, the best way to

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children

is not by giving them all they ask for, and unlimited

freedom

as some consequences like anxiety and depression may set in during their later

age

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