Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

Crime
is
an
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unavoidable in today’s
society
. There are few
people
believe
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that capital
punishment
is advisable for a person who commits a dangerous
crime
.
However
, others believe that it is not advisable in today's
society
. In my opinion, we don’t have the right to take other
people
's lives and innocent
people
might get punished. Certainly, the primary merit of the death penalty is to reduce the
crime
rate. It is increasing on daily basis, and it must be controlled by the government.
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by the police department at my location to bring fear in criminals from committing crimes.
In addition
, it makes
people
secure.
People
's safety is essential for the country and
this
kind of
punishment
will make
people
feel safe and secure. The death penalty is important to create a safe
society
. On other hand,capital
punishment
might affect the life an innocent
people
. In today’s
society
,
punishment
is not given to a person who commits a
crime
. There are
people
who surrender
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money on behalf of other
people
.
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, my friend was convicted for an unknown criminal record on him for money.
Moreover
, the government must value the life of human
being
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. It is a gift from God and we don’t have the right to take it away. The death penalty is not always the right solution for a
crime
. To conclude, even though,
crime
becomes lesser as a human being the government must look into the reason for
crime
as well as the value of
people
.
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