Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

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Crime

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unavoidable in today’s

society

. There are few

people

believe

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who believe

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that capital

punishment

is advisable for a person who commits a dangerous

crime

However

, others believe that it is not advisable in today's

society

. In my opinion, we don’t have the right to take other

people

's lives and innocent

people

might get punished. Certainly, the primary merit of the death penalty is to reduce the

crime

rate. It is increasing on daily basis, and it must be controlled by the government.

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by the police department at my location to bring fear in criminals from committing crimes.

In addition

, it makes

people

secure.

People

's safety is essential for the country and

this

kind of

punishment

will make

people

feel safe and secure. The death penalty is important to create a safe

society

. On other hand,capital

punishment

might affect the life an innocent

people

. In today’s

society

punishment

is not given to a person who commits a

crime

. There are

people

who surrender

for

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money on behalf of other

people

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, my friend was convicted for an unknown criminal record on him for money.

Moreover

, the government must value the life of human

being

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beings

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. It is a gift from God and we don’t have the right to take it away. The death penalty is not always the right solution for a

crime

. To conclude, even though,

crime

becomes lesser as a human being the government must look into the reason for

crime

as well as the value of

people

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Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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