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Some people believe cycle have a lot of advantage. whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantage. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #cycle #advantage #bicycle
In
this
 contemporary era ,
living
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 standards of human beings have significantly impacted their life . A school of thought believes that using
cycle
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cycles
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instead
 of other modes of transportation is tremendously beneficial ,
however
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 some opponents argue that there are numerous negative ramifications of
this
 strategy.
This
 discourse delves into both views of arguments in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with , various vehicles types lead to
escalate
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 the level of the pollution ,prompting to generate a number of health disorders but if an individual
is
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apply
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tend to use
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 for short distances there will be
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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 of toxin gases in
environment
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the environment
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, attributing to protect the physical well being of earth creatures.
Moreover
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 health is the treasury of a person because whole life
cycle
 relies on the body strength in order to remain fit, despite paying
large
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 amount of gym fess an inexpensive exercise of
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 should
preffered
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preferred
 for maintaining the tone and shape of the body . To cite an example, in India there is
organization
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an organization
the organization
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 of
bicycle
 competition on which influences persons to stay healthy ,
although
 using
cycle
plungged
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plugged
plunged
 the harmful releases of carbon dioxide from surroundings . On the counterparts,if there is
declination
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the declination
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 in the usage of other vehicles production units have to bear the heavy loss
beacuse
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because
 majority of people will get more driven towards using
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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 and it will automatically
effect
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affect
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 the economy of the nation as the cost of
another transports
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another transport
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 is relatively higher
then
two wheel
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cycle
 .
For instance
, there will be more wastage of time by using the
cycle
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because
beacuse
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because
 there will be a lot of time consumption if a work has to
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accomplished
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 by using the
cycle
. To conclude, beyond doubt there are countless merits of
this
 practice
beacuse
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because
 it is helpful in decreasing pollution and enhancing the ability of
body
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the body
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 in long
terms
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,whereas the manufacturers have to face the stage of uncertainty in business by
this
 phenomenon.
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