Some people believe cycle have a lot of advantage. whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantage. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In
this
contemporary era ,
living
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standards of human beings have significantly impacted their life . A school of thought believes that using
cycle
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cycles

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instead
of other modes of transportation is tremendously beneficial ,
however
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,however

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some opponents argue that there are numerous negative ramifications of
this
strategy.
This
discourse delves into both views of arguments in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with , various vehicles types lead to
escalate
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escalating

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the level of the pollution ,prompting to generate a number of health disorders but if an individual
is
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apply

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tend to use
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle

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for short distances there will be
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction

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of toxin gases in
environment
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the environment

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, attributing to protect the physical well being of earth creatures.
Moreover
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,Moreover

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health is the treasury of a person because whole life
cycle
relies on the body strength in order to remain fit, despite paying
large
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a large

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amount of gym fess an inexpensive exercise of
bicycle
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the bicycle

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should
preffered
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preferred

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for maintaining the tone and shape of the body . To cite an example, in India there is
organization
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an organization
the organization

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of
bicycle
competition on which influences persons to stay healthy ,
although
using
cycle
plungged
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plugged
plunged

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the harmful releases of carbon dioxide from surroundings . On the counterparts,if there is
declination
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the declination

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in the usage of other vehicles production units have to bear the heavy loss
beacuse
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because

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majority of people will get more driven towards using
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle

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and it will automatically
effect
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affect

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the economy of the nation as the cost of
another transports
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another transport
other transports

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is relatively higher
then
two wheel
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two-wheel

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cycle
.
For instance
, there will be more wastage of time by using the
cycle
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because

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beacuse
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because

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there will be a lot of time consumption if a work has to
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be accomplished

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accomplished
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accomplish

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by using the
cycle
. To conclude, beyond doubt there are countless merits of
this
practice
beacuse
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because

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it is helpful in decreasing pollution and enhancing the ability of
body
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the body

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in long
terms
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term

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,whereas the manufacturers have to face the stage of uncertainty in business by
this
phenomenon.
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