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Some people think music plays an important role in society. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.

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Village
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the Village
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 of
Chorleywood
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 the northeast and southern part of
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Chorleywood
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 course. In detail, there was a small group of people residing
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Chorleywood
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 1868 to 1883. The village was extended to the south of the existing village almost triple in size between 1883 and 1922 with the development of
Chorleywood
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continued to grow between 1922 to 1970 alongside the railway.
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 1970 to 1994, the motorway was built in 1970 and the
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 has dramatically increased almost 5 times of the people size in 1868 on both sides of the
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motorway and
motorway
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population
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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