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Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other. Others believe we are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, there are different opinions about whether
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 are more independent or not.
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 article will discuss these two perspectives. On the one hand, it is true that today's
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 live a more self-reliant lifestyle than ever before. the main reason for
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 trend is because of the development of technologies, especially the Internet, which provides easy access to various knowledge and skills.
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, help from teachers and senior workers is no longer necessary for both students and junior staff, and most
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 are able to achieve their assignments on their own.
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, a growing number of
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 are addicted to online activities,
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 as playing video games and watching TV programmes. they prefer interaction with computers rather than communication with others. Obviously,
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 trend causes a great gap between family members and friends.
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, it is
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 true that nowadays
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 became more dependent on each other on a global scale and from the aspect of industrial production.
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, with the development of globalization, our world has become a global village.
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, cooperation among countries becomes common and necessary.
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, for the sake of reducing cost and providing higher quality commodities, many international companies take the advantage of advanced technology to design and research their products in developed countries
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 and produce and manufacture goods in developing areas because of the lower cost of raw materials and labours.
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, because of the standardization and industrialization of production in modern societies, each individual only plays a small part in the whole working process. In another word, every job or achievement needs the contribution of a huge group of
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 from various fields. In conclusion, on a smaller scale,
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 as in families, workplaces and schools,
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 become more independent than ever.
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, on a larger scale,
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 as throughout the whole world and the whole society,
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 get closer relationships with each other.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • globalization
  • remote work
  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
  • social validation
  • individualism
  • self-reliance
  • collective action
  • sustainability
  • global community
  • navigating
  • complexity
  • environmental movement
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