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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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At the present, many
products
 that we buy are made in other countries
instead
 of being made in their countries. In
this
 essay, I will provide and discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 way of production and
also
 give my perspective on
this
 point. On the one hand, the advantages of producing many
products
 in other states are several.
Firstly
, customers will get a variety of choices to choose the product that they want to buy.
Secondly
, they can compare and contrast the
goods
 which they purchase.
Lastly
, some regions have special experts in some manufacturing processes,
such
 as the car manufacturing process.
For example
, if customers decide to purchase a car, they can think very carefully about which car is the best to purchase and they can compare and contrast cars from Asia and Europe which one is suitable and not expensive that they can afford.
As a result
, they will obtain the best condition and benefit from buying
goods
 that they compared with each other.
On the contrary
, manufacturing
products
 from other regions
also
 gives a few disadvantages for the country.
Firstly
, there will be more competition between local and international
products
.
As a result
, local production factories decide not to compete with international factories anymore because most buyers make a decision to buy their
goods
 from other states rather than local
products
.
Lastly
, most commodities from other regions usually are expensive when we compare those
products
 with local
products
 because international commodities usually add price up due to international taxes and exchanging currency rates. In conclusion, I think that producing
goods
 from other countries will provide more benefits than drawbacks because it provides customers' wants and needs from purchasing those
products
.
Submitted by boatakrawin on

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