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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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At the present, many
products
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 that we buy are made in other countries
instead
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 of being made in their countries. In
this
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 essay, I will provide and discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
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 way of production and
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 give my perspective on
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 point. On the one hand, the advantages of producing many
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 in other states are several.
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, customers will get a variety of choices to choose the product that they want to buy.
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, they can compare and contrast the
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 which they purchase.
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, some regions have special experts in some manufacturing processes,
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 as the car manufacturing process.
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, if customers decide to purchase a car, they can think very carefully about which car is the best to purchase and they can compare and contrast cars from Asia and Europe which one is suitable and not expensive that they can afford.
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, they will obtain the best condition and benefit from buying
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 that they compared with each other.
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, manufacturing
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 from other regions
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 gives a few disadvantages for the country.
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, there will be more competition between local and international
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.
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, local production factories decide not to compete with international factories anymore because most buyers make a decision to buy their
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 from other states rather than local
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.
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, most commodities from other regions usually are expensive when we compare those
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 with local
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 because international commodities usually add price up due to international taxes and exchanging currency rates. In conclusion, I think that producing
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 from other countries will provide more benefits than drawbacks because it provides customers' wants and needs from purchasing those
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.
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