Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with their academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Acquisition of
skills
is necessary
in
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our daily
living
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. It is often believed that children of
school going
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age should incorporate
learning
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the learning
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of
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skills
into their regular studies . I completely agree
to
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this
statement and
this
essay is going to explain more
on
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my viewpoint.
To begin
with, learning
of
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new
skills
is essential as it will help broaden the
students
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mind. Learning
of
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a skill involves the use of the mind and
this
helps in ways
such
as
problem solving
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, improves our way of thinking and boosts the quality of our lives as well. Most individuals with
skills
are
self reliant
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and Independent as well because they are exposed to the job market. In most
instances
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school children who take up some skill do well in class than their colleagues who are not trained in any other field.
Furthermore
, one can earn a living from the acquisition of new
skills
. Training of students in fields
such
as car maintenance, bead making and hairdressing reduces
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over
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dependence of these children on their parents and the government at large.A
skillful
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person can be
self employed
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and stand the chance of gaining employment in different organizations as compared to one who has no
skills
.
For example
, the finance minister of Ghana, Honorable Ken Ofori Atta, in a speech delivered to students of the University of Ghana advised them on the need to learn new
skills
and
trade
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such
as fashion designing and makeup as
this
will help them gain employment rather than relying on the formal sector. In conclusion,
skills
acquisition is very beneficial to every student as it helps broaden their scope of mind and make them independent as well.
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