The best way to tackle the problem of obesity is to educate people about healthy eating. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays,
Obesity
is a chronic disease
for
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a
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people
. Due to
obesity
,
people
become fat, chubby, etc. Educating
the
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people
about
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healthy
health
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
diet
is one of the best ways to reduce
the
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obesity
. In
this
essay, I agree with the above assumption.
Firstly
,
by
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providing knowledge of healthy food taking reduces
the
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obesity
.
Obesity
leads to
heartattack
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heart attack
heart-attack
, blood pressure, etc. By taking
the
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healthy food human beings can reduce the problems of
obesity
. Due to
lack
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of
diet
plan
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obesity
in
people
is rapidly increasing.
For example
,
most
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of the film industry
people
are planning their
diet
to be healthy.
On the other hand
, some film industry
people
are suffering
with
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heartattacks
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heart attacks
,
overweight
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, etc. Due to
unsuffient
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insufficient
knowledge on the healthy
food
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most
people
are suffering with
this
diease
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disease
. To conclude, Healthy
diet
results
healthy
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lives. Educating
people
regarding healthy eating is the best way to avoid
these
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this obesity problem
these obesity problems
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obesity
problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity epidemic
  • educate
  • awareness
  • healthy eating habits
  • nutrition
  • balanced diet
  • nutrient-rich
  • fruits and vegetables
  • home-cooked meals
  • fast food
  • processed foods
  • portion control
  • mindful eating
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
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