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Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#countries #shops #products #consider #development
Nowadays, there are
bunch
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 of
shops
 and
variety
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 of
products
 booming in various
countries
. Some people might consider
this
as
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a positive development and some might consider
them
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it
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as
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a
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 negative
developments
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development
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. In my opinion, I vouch that it is completely a positive note. On
one
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 hand, in
this
 modern era a
lot
 of things are getting developed
similarly
 there are
shops
 and
products
are
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opening their branches in different
countries
 which is
good
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a good
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 sign because the market is blooming on top of
this
 a large variety of
products
 are being available to a
lot
 more population. The
shops
 used to
specific
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 to
few
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a few
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countries
 only and all the
products
 were not available in all places. People started using online
platform
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platforms
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 to reach their needs, where a
lot
 of people got swayed by different fake websites.
In
addition
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addition,
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 ended up buying fake
products
 as well.
For example
, when I was on a trip to London I pampered myself with some
skin care
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skincare
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 goodies and I absolutely loved using them,
however
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however,
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 when I wanted to refill my
products
 I couldn’t find them anywhere in India. So I tried finding them online, I was completely elated and ordered them but ended up getting the fake ones. So problems like
this
 can be solved and it would be more convenient
to
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 the population across the world.
On the other hand
, to open
shops
 in different
countries
 a
lot
 of deforestation is happening and the land is conquered by the industrialists in order to construct buildings. The environment is getting spoiled leading to
lot
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a lot
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 of consequences.
For example
, I purchased a villa because it had a beautiful view of the
tress
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trees
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 right next to my house and
also
 for proper ventilation. In
few
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a few
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 months all the
tress
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trees
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 were cut off and a shopping mall was constructed.
To conclude
,
According to
me
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me,
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 it is a positive development because to
reach
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meet
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 the needs of the growing population it is better to have many branches in various
different
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apply
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countries
 as it would be accessible to residents in
variety
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a variety
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 of locations.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly introduces the topic and provides a clear thesis statement. Also, your conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your opinion.
Task Achievement
Make sure to address both sides of the argument in a balanced way. Provide more specific examples and elaborate on the negative impacts of the increased number of shops and products.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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