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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, all authorities work to improve the transporting system of their countries so there are many
people
 who reckon that it should be spent a
lot
 of
money
 to make fast lines for
trains
 while others believe that
this
money
 should spend to fix the current of public transport. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides and give my opinion.
First
 of all, the constructing of the new fast road for railways help to improve the transporting sector so
this
 needs to spend a
lot
 of
money
 to make those lines that help to decrease the crise of traffic,
moreover
 the number of
people
 who use other ways for moving like buses or cars, they will decrease because they will find the fast train that helps them to move in a fast way.
For instance
, in ,Japan there are many fast
trains
 that connect all major cities with each other and they always fund any project which helps to make a new thing about
trains
however
 in my perspective, the expenditure for fast
trains
 is worth it.
On the other hand
, others believe that the governments should spend more
money
 to improve traditional public transport
instead
 of making a new railway because in many cases the infrastructure of roads needs too many fixing processes.
For example
, in many countries the number of public buses are minimum
this
 may lead to an increase in the congestion of traffic because all individuals have to use their own cars to move so in my view, general transport is important but the fast train is able to solve all problem that
people
 suffer from it. Overall, many
people
 think that it should be made new fast
trains
 that
people
 can use to move between all cities
instead
 of spending a
lot
 of
money
 to improve the conventional public sector so ,in my opinion, I believe that it should be spent a
lot
 of
money
 for any project about fast
trains
 that it is considered so beneficial for those countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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