Some people believe that newspaper is the best way to learn about news. While others believe that more effective way is through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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speedy to improve and
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into
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our life.
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post
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most
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of the
news
rather than
use
realistic
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two
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views
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and suggest my perspective.
For instance
, publication
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issued daily or at other regular times that provides
news
, views, features, and other information of public interest and that often carries advertising. But nowadays
newspaper
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gradually
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due to
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rare of the
people
. Some
people
said that
this
tools
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has
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been already become
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nostalgia
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.
Moreover
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different
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layout, A1 would be
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first
page, usually showing
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the
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big accident.
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,
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, the reports occupied to whole A1 even more to A2-3.
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, the eldest
people
recently unstring to
use
newspaper
which they cannot without any
news
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. The advantage is they can
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the paper and
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well which may be their son or daughter admitted some interview in the
newspaper
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someday.
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, most
people
think
of
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the
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network media
is
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the best way
tools
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tool
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. In recent, everyone uses on the
smart phone
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, media
company
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companies
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were ubiquitous,
our
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finger tips
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can speedy to search
various
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information details
in
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any platform. Enormous pages attacked our eyes, vibrant
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video
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videos
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which we attracted a lot.
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use
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their part of
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owing to
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convenience. In conclusion, I totally agree network platform
news
is the best successful way. They provide a rapid report, and useful information bring every
people
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their time which they can do the
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at the same time
such
as wash the dishes.
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hope,
people
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can spread the education
with
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eldest
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the eldest
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people
to
use
the phone
news
,
bring
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and bring
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them to try a wonderful internet world.
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