Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

People have different thoughts concerning
acceptance
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the acceptance
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of
unpleasant
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the unpleasant
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situation
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as
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to embracing changes. While there are some benefits in allowing
this
condition
, I believe improving upon
such
condition
comes with more advantages in life. Humans give room to certain bad
condition
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in life because it is above their control. An example is the death of a child, husband and
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dear friend. Death is a natural event that befalls everyone at an unknown time across the lifespan. People cannot grieve for their whole lifetime and
therefore
have to accept and move on.
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sadness may raise natural chemicals in the body, which in turn will cause emotional distress, depression and diabetes. Another instance is when you are limited with skills or knowledge to perform a job of your choice, you just lay
hands
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on whatever comes your way in order to provide basic needs
such
as education, food and medical care for your family. Rules imposed by higher authorities over
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citizens
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can
also
compare them to follow any decision made on their
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,
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it negative or positive.
On the other hand
, improvement in one’s living
condition
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is very crucial than remaining static without updates. Modern advancement is giving everyone
opportunity
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to make progress and upgrade themselves. Upgrading your skills or knowledge in higher education will lift you up from poverty and ameliorate your general wellbeing. People without better job opportunities receive lower salaries, are not able to make
hence
meat and
therefore
become
a
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dependent on the government,
this
lowers their self -esteem which
some
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cases result in committing suicide.
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Citizen
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The citizen
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must work hard for the betterment of their life. In conclusion, it is essential to accept
bad
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situation since they have no command over it, on contrary improvement brings more reward and satisfaction
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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