Violence in the society is largely promoted by violence shown in media. To what extent do you agree?

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In the

last

decade, several forms of

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and media

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increasingly

started

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displaying

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playing

violent

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. It is often believed that

this

type of exposure can encourage people to act harmfully. In the following paragraphs, I will explain and give reasons why I agree with the previous statement.

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, constant exposure to horror can enable someone's sensitivity to it. If a person is perpetually shown through television violent images they will most likely find it common

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will not be

appaled

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applied

by it if it happens in real life.

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, a recent study showed that victims of domestic abuse with

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who used to live previously in a country at war had

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chances of getting a testimony in

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of the abuse compared to the ones who lived near a family who ever went through a traumatic experience.

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why in order to keep a sense of humanity one should limit itself from scarring images.

Secondly

, displaying cruel events, especially to the younger population, can impact their

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patterns. When a child or a teenager sees numerous acts of violence on a daily basis, he will tend to reproduce that

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For instance

, a recent French article reported that schools

where pupils had watched the

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, where pupils had watched the TV-show Squid Game,

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Squid Game proclaimed more fighting complaints than any other school.

Therefore

, controlling what type of content our youngsters watch is very important in order for them to have healthy

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. To conclude, violence mediated through screens is often considered the main factor for the harm generated in our societies. Not only

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one's ability to acknowledge cruel actions but

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encourages destructive

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