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Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public trasportation systems in order to help solve this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowlegde and experience.

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Air
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pollution
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 is mostly caused by
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 and
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. It pollutes the
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 as it is burning the fuel. Nowadays, there are many
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 in most of the world which pollute the
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. Some
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 say that the government should spend
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 to improve public transportation in order to solve
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 issue. While other
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 believe that spending
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 on improving eco-friend
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 as electric
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 or any other types of
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 causes less
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. Both opinions are having advantages but I believe that the
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 one will be more effective. Spending
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 to develop public transport is a good way to encourage
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 to reduce using
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 and using public transportations. But some
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 will still use
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 because they may not like using public transportations or going into a crowded vehicle.
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, Spending
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 to develop electric
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 will be more effective in reducing the usage of
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 that pollute the
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 since
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 who may not use public transportation will find
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 a good way rather than using public transportations.
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, if someone doesn't like using buses so he uses a private car but if the car is turned into an electric car and
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 will reduce
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pollution
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.
Air
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pollution
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 is a major problem and we must try to protect our planet from
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pollution
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. Some
people
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 say that the government should spend more
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 on developing public transportation. Other
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 say that spending
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 to develop electric
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 to decrease
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pollution
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 which I agree with.
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