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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. Has the positive effects been more than negative ?

#people #technology #effects
In today's
world
,
technology
 plays a dramatic role as well as
it
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directly impacts
people
’s relationships with each other. In
this
 essay, I will explore how
technology
 involves
people
 interaction,
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of that.
Firstly
 I will show how
technology
 changes
this
 and
secondly
 demonstrate
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of it. Before
world
 war 2,
people
 did not have
proper
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the proper
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 technologies to manage their connectivity with each other. Mostly they had to navigate to meet relevant
people
 or they used different mediums like passing messages over other messengers,
sending
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and sending
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 messages using animals like pigeons. But
this
 was completely changed after the
world
 war. They have invented the telephone, internet, mobile phones, social media etc.
Now
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this
 has become a massive level.
People
 use the internet to communicate with a person over the sea or
another
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in another
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 country which is far away within a few seconds. They are using social media like
facebook
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Facebook
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,
twitter
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Twitter
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 to pass their messages to a person or entire community. They use chat applications like
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
Whatsapp
,
imo
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IMO
 to chat with their loved ones. Not
technology
 makes it easier to interact with
people
.
However
, there are pros and cons
of
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 the
technology
. Most of the time it depends on the
people
's usage. Due to
this
 technical impact, the
world
 has become more digitized.
People
 like to meet with each other virtually rather than meet physically.
This
 will be a reason to separate the
people
 from each other physically.
Other hand
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, there are
lots
 of frauds going on
with
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on
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 the internet.
Lots
 of
people
 use fake details,
fake
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and fake
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 profiles to be with each other.
Therefore
lots
 of unwanted things happened.
Lots
 of news cited international frauds like robbing,
hijacking
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and hijacking
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 today.
In
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To
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 sum up, even though
technology
 makes our life easier as well as it makes society more complicated. In my opinion,
technology
 has become both a positive and negative development in modern society. Using
technology
 in the right way will be easier for us to get the maximum benefit of it.
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