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With modern transportation, workers and students are increasingly mobile, and have more and more opportunities to study and work abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development.

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These days, it is easy to take out a person from his country for the purpose of study and work.
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 can explore new cultures now more than ever. At the same time, world
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 may become disconnected from their own home countries. In
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. To be sure, ordinary
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 now have unprecedented access to life abroad. It is easier than ever to work or study in a foreign land for months and even years. Many large international corporations offer overseas work to their employees, just as nearly all universities provide study abroad options at partner campuses overseas. Ultimately, nearly any adult anywhere in the world can potentially immerse themselves in another language or culture, with support from their bosses or teachers. The problem is that international workers and students sometimes become unconcerned with the affairs
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 the nations they are from.
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 kind of apathy can prevent
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 from doing their civic duty. As one example,
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 from countries with compulsory military service may spend years abroad and even renounce their citizenship to avoid protecting their homeland. Even more commonly,
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 who go abroad may choose not to vote in elections back home, failing to make their voice heard on important matters. So modern mobility can undermine one’s ability or desire to make a difference back home. Learning about other cultures by actually living abroad is a powerful tool for better intercultural understanding.
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, as valuable as
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 to ignore the importance of their own culture and country. Not all students and workers should go abroad, and the ones that do should not forget their role in their country of origin.
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