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Behaviour in schools is getting worse Explain the causes and effects of this problem and suggest some possible solutions

#behaviour #schools #effects
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Schools
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 play a crucial role in everyone's life. People's
behaviour
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 in
schools
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 getting inferior due to lack of discipline and family problems.
This
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 essay will describe the reasons for
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 problem.
Firstly
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,
Behaviour
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 in
schools
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 is becoming poor due to a lack of discipline. Nowadays, in most countries
faculty
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 in
school
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 are not allowed to hurt
children
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, so
children
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 in
school
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 are breaking the rules. To overcome
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 problem,
faculty
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 should punish the
children
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 by giving homework and conducting some awareness programs regarding respecting elders,etc.
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, in the USA, people have no right to punish the
children
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 physically while they should deal with the
children
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 by keeping some rules and regulations.
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, due to family
problem's
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problem
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 most parents neglect their
children
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. Parents will not take care of their
children
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 in
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 situation.
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 will impact
children
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's
behaviour
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 mostly. Due to their family member's
behaviour
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children
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 will not behave properly. To solve
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 issue,
children
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 should not be involved in any family problems. To sum up, the
behaviour
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 of
children
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 in
school
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 is the most important thing. In
schools
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,
faculty
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 should give preference to the
behaviour
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 of
children
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 rather than their studies.
Faculty
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 should treat
children
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 in a friendly way.
School
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 life is an important part of everybody's life.
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