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Some people think that a person can never understand a culture of the country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with this opinion?

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It raging discussion that people will not be able to realize the cultural value of foreign countries unless their native tongue is not meticulously learnt. For them,
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 they have to be able to reach a specific literacy level in their education system, for increasing understanding rate,
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 of sentimental values. To that end, I am contrary to
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 case a person does not possess any intention toward a new language, he will inevitably fail. Owing to
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 the difficulties in the learning process of foreign land’s customs.
First
 and foremost, we are living in a technology world, to clarify, it is truly easy to be knowledgeable in a short period of time by the means of
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, it should be taken into consideration that prodigious online vocabularies exist on the Internet. To that end, every word can be translated
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 numerous languages within a minute, so there is no need to learn each of them simultaneously. To sum up,
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 a section of society reckons that in order to gather prominent information about their culture as well as ethics, you need to pedantically communicate in their native language.
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, due to an avalanche of online free sources, tourists are not obliged to acquire new communication skills in other regions
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