1. Some people think that the best way to reduce the fourth dimension spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with buildings apartments for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own public opinion. ( Society )

Opinions diverge as to whether it is more effective to erect buildings
apartments
Correct word choice
and apartments
show examples
rather than green places
such
as parks, gardens, and so on to accommodate the worker's needs of travelling to work.
However
, I am of the firm notion that while the
demantle
Correct your spelling
dismantle
of friendly entertainment spots can bring both merits and drawbacks, the latter
still
Add a missing verb
is still
show examples
an obvious choice.
This
essay will attempt to address the reasons for my views as follows. On the one hand, there is an array of testaments why it is believed that constructing working places for commuters in lieu of green places is an ideal way. One of the most prominent
reason
Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
show examples
is that
white-collars
Correct your spelling
white collars
show examples
can diminish the time
spending
Replace the word
spent
show examples
on distance movement. It is commonplace for labours to be postponed by long-distance commute with several
harship
Correct your spelling
hardship
hardships
conditions
such
as heavy congestion, disasters, etc. Their productivity can
therefore
be
exarcebated
Correct your spelling
exacerbated
owing to the over-spending of stamina on previous travel.
This alarming problems
Change the determiner
This alarming problem
These alarming problems
show examples
can be easily solved to enhance the
qualities
Fix the agreement mistake
quality
show examples
of duties provided that a renovation scheme which
focus
Change the verb form
focuses
show examples
mostly on gathering work building together in the city
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
is conducted.
Submitted by pinkanh911 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: