Some people think watching tv is bad for children, while others think that watching tv has more beneficial effects on children . Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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With the development of technology, More and more families have televisions. There is a problem
that is
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kids
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watching
TV
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bad for
health
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, but
some
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some
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don't think so. They think it is good for
kids
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. I completely agree
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children
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with children
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watching
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watch
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TV
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. The person
think
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thinks
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watching
TV
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is a good method for
kids
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. It can encourage
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children
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children's
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intelligence. We can learn a lot of
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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by watching
TV
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.
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, There are a variety of
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shows,
such
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as Discovery
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, education
programs
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, food
programs
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, you name it.
Children
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like animals very much when they were a child, So they
used
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to watching
TV
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about animal
programs
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. They can learn a lot of knowledge
taht
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that
make them to solved
differenet
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different
problems. So It's good for
kids
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.
Wathcing
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Watching
TV
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can improve
children
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's intelligence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary behavior
  • unrealistic perceptions
  • creative pursuits
  • social development
  • emotional development
  • constructive content
  • screen time
  • parental guidance
  • critical thinking
  • active learning
  • age-appropriate
  • media literacy
  • family bonding
  • moderation
  • perceive
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