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Some people think lawbreakers should be sent to prison, while others think that alternatives to prison are more suitable, especially for minor offences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Anyone who breaks the law should be punished. Some
people
 consider lawbreakers must serve their time in
prison
, while others maintain that
alternatives
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 measures are more suitable for those who
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committed
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commit
 minor offences. Personally, I think that the punishment should be dependent on the crime. Murders or who
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committed
 robbery should face
life
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.
Teenagers
 with juvenile
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delinquency
deliquency
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delinquency
 can do community service
instead
 of going to
prison
.
To begin
 with, in order to maintain
the
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justice and protect innocent
people
, all lawbreakers should get punished. Especially
for
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those who murdered or raped other
people
, they must be sent to
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prison
. They caused huge
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threats
threat
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society
,
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 and should face
life
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. Considering the severity of
crime
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the crime
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, alternatives to
prison
 are not suitable. They might hurt other
people
 if they are not locked down in the
prison
.
On the other hand
, alternative penalties should be adequate for those who had minor offences.
For example
, reckless drivers who
overspeed
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in
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 the highway can do community service
instead
 of going to jail. Underaged
teenagers
 who break the law to try alcohol can serve in
the
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volunteer work.
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 in
prison
 will make
teenagers
 misbehave as they learn bad habits from their inmates who
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committed
commited
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committed
 major crimes. The negative effects will outweigh the positive effects for these
teenagers
.
Moreover
, the prisons will be overcrowded if
every one
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 who breaks the law is sent to
the
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prison
. It would be a
waster
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 of taxpayers’ money. In conclusion, I disagree that all
the
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lawbreakers should
be
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face
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 in the
prison
. The punishment should be decided case by case. Community service and other alternatives are suitable for those with only minor
crime
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crimes
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.
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