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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them? Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Keeping
pets
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 in houses
very
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 common nowadays. Most
of
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the
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children
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 wish to keep
pets
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 like cats and dogs.
Children
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 are always happy when they are with
the
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their
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pets
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. But some people think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them. There are many benefits
by
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to
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 having a pet in your family.
Pets
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 can make everyone happy
specially
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 kids. Kids never feel alone if they have
pets
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. Humans and their
pets
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 make loving bonds that
last
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 forever. They keep
children
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 fit. Normally dogs need
daily
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 walk to be healthy and so do
children
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. They never let to be their owners alone. And they reduce our stress. They may be able to teach
children
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 responsibility. And
also
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, they make our
children
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 feel safe.
Specially
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 when the parents
out
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are out
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 of the home dogs protect kids.
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,
pets
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 can be dangerous at times. When they didn’t get
the
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attention, they behave unnaturally. Biting and scratching is a common unnatural
behaviors
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behavior
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 of
pets
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. And
also
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, regular baths
are need
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are needed
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 for them.
Otherwise
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, they can get sicknesses. Need to do vaccination annually.
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, they can get rabies –
viral
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a viral
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 infection. It is
a
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very dangerous and can spread to people by bitten by
a
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an
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 infected animal. Rabies usually caused death. In my
opinion
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 having
pets
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 have more advantages than disadvantages. There
for
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keeping
pets
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 is good for
children
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. They are
important
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an important
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 part of our lives.
Pets
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 are
best
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the best
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 friends of humans.

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