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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them? Which viewpoint do you agree with?

#people #pets #children
Keeping
pets
 in houses
very
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 common nowadays. Most
of
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the
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children
 wish to keep
pets
 like cats and dogs.
Children
 are always happy when they are with
the
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pets
. But some people think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them. There are many benefits
by
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 having a pet in your family.
Pets
 can make everyone happy
specially
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 kids. Kids never feel alone if they have
pets
. Humans and their
pets
 make loving bonds that
last
 forever. They keep
children
 fit. Normally dogs need
daily
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 walk to be healthy and so do
children
. They never let to be their owners alone. And they reduce our stress. They may be able to teach
children
 responsibility. And
also
, they make our
children
 feel safe.
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 when the parents
out
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 of the home dogs protect kids.
On the other hand
,
pets
 can be dangerous at times. When they didn’t get
the
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attention, they behave unnaturally. Biting and scratching is a common unnatural
behaviors
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 of
pets
. And
also
, regular baths
are need
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 for them.
Otherwise
, they can get sicknesses. Need to do vaccination annually.
Otherwise
, they can get rabies –
viral
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a viral
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 infection. It is
a
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very dangerous and can spread to people by bitten by
a
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 infected animal. Rabies usually caused death. In my
opinion
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 having
pets
 have more advantages than disadvantages. There
for
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keeping
pets
 is good for
children
. They are
important
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 part of our lives.
Pets
 are
best
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the best
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 friends of humans.
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