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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way

#businesses #emphasise #products
Most Traders and Business organizations while advertising always
stress
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 the fact that their goods and services are new in one way or the other.
This
 could be
as
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a result of the
patronage
 they get from the public when they paint their product as new.I believe
this
 has a positive effect as it helps to maximize the profit of these products by bringing more
patronage
. Most individuals prefer new items to their existing products.They think of it as the best as they believe
this
 is what is trending or
invoke
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. Others,they feel are inquisitive and would want to try these new brands out of curiosity.
Furthermore
, traders or businesses want to paint their brand as new as they believe
this
 creates more awareness and attracts consumers thereby increasing their profit made.
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,a company
who
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 has
being
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 producing a particular product over a long period of time and finds out that there is constantly
a
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low
patronage
 would definitely want to try new initiatives and
this
 could include a new brand. In my opinion,I think it's a welcomed development as it will help the business to grow.People will show more interest in the product if they think it's new. Seeing a good or service continuously by consumers can be boring at some point,but when they notice something new,
this
 may attract them thereby increasing
patronage
. In conclusion,I believe advertising
produce
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 as new will help to improve the profit they derive as
this
 will increase its purchase by the masses.
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