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The diagrams below give information about the Azadi Tower in Tehran and an outline project to extend it underground. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown

The diagrams below give information about the Azadi Tower in Tehran and an outline project to extend it underground. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown
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During your trip to Iran,
Azadi
 Square is the first location you will pass by.
This
 Square, which is located in the west of Tehran, consists
the
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 most important
tower
 and monument in Iran.
Azadi
 in
persian
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 means freedom. Because of
it’s
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its
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 meaning, the
tower
 attracts tourists’ attention. It can help them to find out
of
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 Iran’s culture and civilization.
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Artitect
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Architect
 of the
tower
 formed it as a shape that starts from the ground and
streches
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stretches
 to the sky. It was designed around 1971 by Hossein Amanat. In 1967, a competition was held among
iranian
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artitects
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architects
 to design a symbol for Iran.
Mr.
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 Amanat won to design
Azadi
Tower
. Mohammad Reza Pahlavi wanted the
tower
represent
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 the 2500th years of
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the persian
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persian
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 Empire.
Azadi
Tower
 is 45 meters high. It comprises four floors, which
they
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consist of
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a museum
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museum
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,
theaters
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, galleries, libraries, and so on. The
tower
 has 4 facades, which are symmetrical with each other. The west and east facades absolutely are more remarkable than
others
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. Substances used in the construction of the
tower
,
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 were brought from various places around the country. The external surface was built with Isfahan marble and Iron. Hamedan granite stone has been used in the construction of the main door, and the stones of the floors are from the stones of Kurdistan Pearl Mine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural landmark
  • commemorate
  • iconic structure
  • reinforced concrete
  • geometric patterns
  • cultural heritage
  • subterranean
  • urban development
  • excavation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • feasibility study
  • economic impact
  • cultural significance
  • public engagement
  • engineering challenges
  • construction phase
  • project outline
  • urban planning
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