The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences and only governmental actions can solve the problem. Do you agree or disagree?

Because of more job opportunities and a more convenient lifestyle, more and more young
people
desire to struggle for living in big
cities
.
On the other hand
, the senior
people
believe big
cities
can provide more advanced medical treatment, so they would leave the
countryside
when the disease comes. To sum up, big
cities
have to accept a high population at the time.
Therefore
, some
people
insist that the shortage of housing in big
cities
can cause severe consequences and only the government can release
this
pressure. From my perspective, these
people
's opinions convinced me.
To begin
with, it is an undebatable reality that almost everyone would like to live in big
cities
. There are many reasons.
For example
,
people
can contact more resources and brands because there are more shipping malls in big
cities
and
people
can select whatever they want.
In addition
,
although
big
cities
may have traffic jams sometimes, they have subway stations, airports, and public traffic systems. You must admit that big
cities
can provide more convenient traffic conditions. Of cause, as I told followed, big
cities
own more companies and hospitals which can provide more occupations and treatment methods.
However
, the area of big
cities
basically can't increase. In that case, population density would scare and the shortage of housing in big
cities
gradually becomes an obvious and severe problem, and the situation will get worse.
However
, most citizens have no ability to change
this
aspect. Only governments can work it out, sadly, some of them just increase the price of houses to let poor
people
leave big
cities
. In my opinion,
this
measure not only deepens the pressure of city life but
also
makes the contradiction between the rich and the poor more severe. The primary cause of
people
's city desire is the unbalance of city and
countryside
development. I think the government should pay more attention to inspiring the
countryside
economy and put more efficient policies to encourage
people
to go back to the
countryside
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban sprawl
  • sustainable development
  • public health
  • community well-being
  • housing policies
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • economic impact
  • cost of living
  • government intervention
  • private sector
  • profit motives
  • housing shortage
  • urban planning
  • incentives
  • low-income families
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