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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It has been argued that a number
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people
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 believe that
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 can be considered
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an effective factor that may cause
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connection between different cultures and age groups. Personally, I do agree with
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 for some reasons.
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 is a bridge which can connect
people
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 from different cultures, countries and ethnicities with each other. From my point of view,
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 is
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 universal language that does not need a specific rule to understand
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. In fact, it can be oriented from
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’s emotions, outlooks and perceptions of the world around them. Individuals can gain some information about
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 communities just by listening to their
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 and
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this
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 can approach them together.
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,
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 not only can bring
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 from different cultures together but
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 it would cause developing closeness between different age ranges. In my opinion,
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 is a piece of art that does not belong to just a particular group of
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.
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, there are various
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music
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 styles
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 the
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 world that have a great number of fans from
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adolescents
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adolescents
 to the elderly.
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, following
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 same type of
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 can establish a connection between different ages. By way of example, they can start communicating and sharing their ideas about their common
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 style and
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 closeness between them. In conclusion, while some
people
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 think that
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 can not be effective in bringing individuals of different
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 and ages together, I strongly believe that we can not deny the prominent role of
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 in approaching communities together since it is a common language between
people
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 that they already know how to understand and interpret it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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