Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It has been argued that a number
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people
believe that
music
can be considered
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an effective factor that may cause
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connection between different cultures and age groups. Personally, I do agree with
this
for some reasons.
To begin
with, I hold the view that
music
is a bridge which can connect
people
from different cultures, countries and ethnicities with each other. From my point of view,
music
is
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universal language that does not need a specific rule to understand
it
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. In fact, it can be oriented from
people
’s emotions, outlooks and perceptions of the world around them. Individuals can gain some information about
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communities just by listening to their
music
and
as a
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this
can approach them together.
Moreover
,
music
not only can bring
people
from different cultures together but
also
it would cause developing closeness between different age ranges. In my opinion,
music
is a piece of art that does not belong to just a particular group of
people
.
For instance
, there are various
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styles
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the
artisc
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world that have a great number of fans from
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adolescents
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adolescents
to the elderly.
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same type of
music
can establish a connection between different ages. By way of example, they can start communicating and sharing their ideas about their common
music
style and
this
would lead to
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closeness between them. In conclusion, while some
people
think that
music
can not be effective in bringing individuals of different
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and ages together, I strongly believe that we can not deny the prominent role of
music
in approaching communities together since it is a common language between
people
that they already know how to understand and interpret it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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