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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that keeping a particular
job
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 early in life brings more
career
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 satisfaction than regular
job
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 hopping. While there are some benefits to switching jobs, I maintain that remaining on a
job
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 is likely to provide
people
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 with greater fulfilment. On the
one
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 hand,
career
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 switching does some wonders for
people
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. The
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 reason is that
people
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 have the opportunity to work in different fields and
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 acquire more skills by changing from
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job
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 to another.
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 to that,
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-hoppers always need to accommodate themselves with a new environment, new co-workers and new workflow, and it results in their flexibility and ability to solve problems well in almost any situation.
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,
people
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 who change jobs more often and experience various working environments may manage to find a potential
job
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 that matches their passion and interests.
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, staying with the same
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 for a long period stands a chance of promotion and rising salaries. Because if
people
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 sharpen their skills and undergo plenty of challenging tasks after years, they will have much experience to be more likely to move up the ladder and earn a lucrative living.
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,
people
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 remaining on a
career
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 path for an extended period of time are put under less pressure. As they only focus on the development of
one
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 field and already become familiar with their workplace and colleagues,
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, they can get little depression and achieve work-life balance. To sum up, I believe that early pursuing and continuing with
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career
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 choice is likely to give a sense of security, and
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 brings more satisfaction in life, though changing jobs can be somehow beneficial to some
people
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.
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