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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child education Wrrit at least 250 words.

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Many youngsters receive no words of encouragement from their
parents
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 concerning their conduct at
school
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, whereas other
children
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 receive too much pressure from their enthusiastic
parents
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 which most times result
to
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bad
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a bad
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 effect on the
child
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. The reason why
parents
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 force
children
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 to perform well in
schools
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school
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 and their roles in their
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child
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child's
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education
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 will be discussed in
this
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 essay. To start with,There
many
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 reasons why
parent
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 pressurize their
children
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 to do well at
school
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.
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, it will make them a better
person
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people
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 in
school
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 and the society at large making them relevant in any areas they find themselves.
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, my little niece is always representing her
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 in
any
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competitions and she has won several awards making her mummy
to
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be proud of her achievements.
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,
parent
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likes
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 their own youngsters competing with their friend’s
children
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, they don’t want others in
anyway
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do
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 better than their
children
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 thereby they are always forcing their
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child
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children
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 to do well and read always .
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, my Aunty always put a price that if my nephew can do better than other
children
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 she will give her dollars or buy her a toy.
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,
parents
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 should
also
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 be active and participate fully in their
child
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’s
education
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.
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, they should always encourage their
child
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 in their academic difficulties which
boost
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 their confidence to do better. Again , they should
also
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 help in solving assignments and explains the one they are finding difficult to understand. They should
also
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 go through their
day to day
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day-to-day
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 class activities to pinpoint corrections when needed and give kudos to them where necessary.
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,
a
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apply
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research conducted in Nigeria shows that 80
percent
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 of
school
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children
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 that did well is
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has
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as
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 a result of their
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parent
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parents
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 commitment
in
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to
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 their
education
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. To summarize,
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parent
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parents
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 put pressure on their
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child’s
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children
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 to do well so they can be a proud mother and they should always play an important
roles
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role
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 too to make their
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child
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child's
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education
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 to be a success. Because they will be the
one
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ones
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 to receive all the accolades

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