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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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If asked whether
people
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 should switch jobs regularly or stay with one occupation, many would struggle to make the final choice. Personally, while
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 hopping has its own benefits, I maintain that
people
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 archive a greater sense of fulfilment when they settle down with a stable
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. On the one hand, those who switch career paths regularly may experience some wonders. The
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 reason is
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 hoppers have the chance to try their hands at different fields and
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 acquire more skills. By switching from one
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 to another, they can enrich their knowledge and receive recognition for their capabilities.
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,
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 hoppers have the opportunity to find what suits them best. As a matter of fact, some
people
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 dislike the idea of staying in a particular
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 for a long time so they need to change jobs more regularly to stay satisfied.
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, choosing a
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 earlier on and keeping it would provide
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 greater satisfaction.
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,
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 would benefit from better
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 prospects, which include promotion opportunities and earning a more lucrative living. In fact, staying with the same
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 for a long period of time may allow someone to advance to the top of their chosen field because they have much experience.
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,
people
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 remaining on a particular career path may have can get on well with others working in the same fields, which may be helpful for them to achieve work-life balance. In conclusion, I believe that
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 hopping has its own benefits, choosing a career earlier and remaining
it
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 for
entire
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your entire
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 life is more likely to bring greater
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 fulfilment.
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