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Some say that people working in different job roles should get different amount of holiday time. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

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Holidays
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 play a vital role in everybody's life. Some public argues that working public should get
holidays
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 based on their proficiency while others feel that everyone should get standard
holidays
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 in any job role. In
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 essay, I shall discuss both scenarios and provide my opinion. On the one side, Some communities that have martial goals risk their life's to the nation. In
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 situation, these community should balance their work-life.
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, communities who work in the army, navy, etc. will take months of a break from their effort to spend time with their families. It is salient to provide more
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 for these soldiers who protect the nation.
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, Some public believe that everyone should be provided with the same
holidays
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 without considering the job role.
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, the public who work in the IT field is desk employers. These public jobs in their offices according to their shifts. So, these IT employees should take a break to relax. These communities take breaks based on their achievements, goals,etc. To sum up, In my ,opinion I agree with the given statement that community should balance their work-life so, it is best to provide break based on their job roles
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • discrimination
  • mental well-being
  • productivity
  • stressful
  • demanding
  • burnout
  • overtime
  • on-call
  • compensation
  • holiday entitlement
  • work-life balance
  • flexible arrangements
  • negotiate
  • job demands
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