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The increase in food production is mostly due to fertilizers and better machinery .Yet, some think that it harms human health and communities.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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These days,thanks to the science and technology which have led producing fertilisers and developed agricultural machinery,
societies
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 are capable of producing
food
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 more than ever before.Many have an opinion that it has adverse effects on human
health
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 and communities.I somewhat agree with
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 idea for some reasons.
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 with, during the
last
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 50 years , with the help of high-tech machine farming and chemical manure,the yield of the farming lands has considerably increased.
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, fewer people around the globe are struggling with starvation.It means there would not be
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 in which individuals suffer from lack of
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 and hunger in a long run.
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, modern agricultural practices have caused a significant decrease in the number of needed farmers in the farming sector. Many people are working in other fields as scientists,teachers or researchers who help
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 flourish.
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, farmers do not work as gruelling as their ancestors , they are entrepreneurs and own their factory farms which not only can meet their country's needs,but
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 can export their products.It would benefit
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 economically.
On the other hand
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, the cancer rate has sharply risen during the
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 5 decades.Many scientists believe,it is inextricably linked to
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 use of chemical fertilisers,pesticides,and herbicides.
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 materials are absorbed in agricultural products
such
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 as vegetables and fruits and
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 are transferred to human bodies by eating them.
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, they will put people to the exposure of serious
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 problems and even some of them who suffer from incurable diseases may die.
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 problems which have rooted in modern farming put burdens on healthcare systems around the world and impose heavy expenses on the states.Apart from that, in order to reduce the amount of
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that is
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 longer on shelves in stores ,some preservatives are added to
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 during their production process that can threaten our
health
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. In summary,
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 the effect of modern farming on relieving starvation worldwide can not be denied,its negative influence on public
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 should be considered as well.so I hope the farming sector revises agricultural manners and can cut down on the usage of chemicals and go back to organic farming for the sake of public
health
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 .
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