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Topic: Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#topic #meat #diet
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Meat
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 is a commodity that has been eaten for ages. It was eaten by our ancestors, who were hunter-gathers on a daily basis along with fruits and berries. At that time
meat
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 was an essential commodity, without which one couldn't survive because agriculture hadn't been discovered at that time. I strongly disagree with
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 statement. In modern times, as our disposable income is increasing the tendency to eat
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 is
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 increasing. The animal industry supports millions of workers who would go jobless if the entire world becomes vegetarian all of a sudden. It is
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 important to respect cultures, that have traditions related to eating
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 and sacrificing animals. It is
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 possible to survive without eating
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, but studies have shown a lack of
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 in vegetarian humans. A vegetarian diet has little to no sources of
protein
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 that can be synthesized by the human body. It supports the body as an excellent source of
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 and vitamins not found in vegetables. A healthy diet in my opinion cannot be fulfilled without
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.
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 is a healthier option than grains
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 as rice and wheat too as these grains have little to no nutritional value while having a high amount of starch, carbohydrates and calories.
Meat
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, on the other ,hand consists of mostly
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, and some fats depending on the part of the animal. In the end, I would like to conclude by saying that vegetarianism shouldn't be imposed, as
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 is healthy, tasty and more nutritious than vegetables.
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