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some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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At some point in their lives, all people face the challenge of how to enter the labour market. They need to decide whether to study at a university or to gain hands-on
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. In my opinion, the decision genuinely depends on the type of
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 one desires.
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 there is an unlimited choice of industry sectors to choose from, some industries require at least an undergraduate degree, in
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 employment specifications must be clearly stated in the
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 advertisement.
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,
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 applicants for
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such
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 as psychologists, doctors or architects must provide proof of their academic qualification from their higher education provider. The reason for
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 is that throughout the university course people gain particular skills and qualities that are necessary for these
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 roles.
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, no amount of
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 can be replaced by a Doctorate qualification from Medical School.
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, not all jobs are like that. Some industries appreciate work
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 more than any degree. When I worked in hospitality, many supervisors and managers had only a secondary level education and were promoted to top
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 of their detailed understanding of how the company works. It can be assumed, that those knowledgeable individuals who worked for the business for many years had a clear advantage over those who were new graduates with no real-life
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 in the field. In conclusion, there is no simple solution to getting the
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job
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. On one hand, there are
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, where an academic qualification from a university is necessary, while hands-on
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 may be invaluable in other jobs. Carrying out the research about dream work
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 would be a great way to make the right choice.
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