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According to a view, children must be trained practically more than theoretically. To what extent do you agree with this view?

In today's modern world, which mainly the informatics revolution shaped, we need skilled and experienced workers more than ever.
Schools
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 are the places where
children
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 are being trained both theoretically and practically. According to a view,
children
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's
education
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 in
schools
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 should focus more on practical
skills
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 than
theory
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. I am close to
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 idea from my previous experiences and knowledge. After establishing mandatory
education
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 in our daily life,
children
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 started to spend most of their time in
schools
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. They improved their literacy, arithmetics, science and art
skills
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 via many teachers.
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, they became an ideal citizen of industrialised societies thanks to
schools
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. A significant part of the
education
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 process was based on
theory
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 in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries.
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, the way of living human life and the
skills
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 that an average person must hold changed dramatically. In recent history, technological advances in the world have shaped our lives, changed some of the professions' definitions and removed the jobs people have been fulfilling for centuries.
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, we realised that
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 is constantly evolving and do not need to exhaust
children
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 with a chunk of theoretical knowledge. We have become more pragmatic since reaching resources that teach
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 is so easy more than ever, but acquiring basic
skills
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 still needs to be practised. To sum up, expectations from
schools
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 changed from term to term.
Children
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 in the nineteenth century must learn fundamental theories and obtain citizenship
skills
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instead
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 of spending lots of time practising. But in today's pragmatic world, where theoretical knowledge can be learned anytime, humanity needs more practically skilled workers.
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 but not least,
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 in
schools
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 should be based on more pratic.

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