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According to a view, children must be trained practically more than theoretically. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In today's modern world, which mainly the informatics revolution shaped, we need skilled and experienced workers more than ever.
Schools
 are the places where
children
 are being trained both theoretically and practically. According to a view,
children
's
education
 in
schools
 should focus more on practical
skills
 than
theory
. I am close to
this
 idea from my previous experiences and knowledge. After establishing mandatory
education
 in our daily life,
children
 started to spend most of their time in
schools
. They improved their literacy, arithmetics, science and art
skills
 via many teachers.
In addition
, they became an ideal citizen of industrialised societies thanks to
schools
. A significant part of the
education
 process was based on
theory
 in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries.
However
, the way of living human life and the
skills
 that an average person must hold changed dramatically. In recent history, technological advances in the world have shaped our lives, changed some of the professions' definitions and removed the jobs people have been fulfilling for centuries.
Moreover
, we realised that
theory
 is constantly evolving and do not need to exhaust
children
 with a chunk of theoretical knowledge. We have become more pragmatic since reaching resources that teach
theory
 is so easy more than ever, but acquiring basic
skills
 still needs to be practised. To sum up, expectations from
schools
 changed from term to term.
Children
 in the nineteenth century must learn fundamental theories and obtain citizenship
skills
instead
 of spending lots of time practising. But in today's pragmatic world, where theoretical knowledge can be learned anytime, humanity needs more practically skilled workers.
Last
 but not least,
education
 in
schools
 should be based on more pratic.
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