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describe a speacial day out that cost you little money

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This
 was the
time
 when
i
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 completed my seminar exams
in
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at
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 my university, so
i
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 decided to go out with my friends so as to let my hair down
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after
atfer
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after
 a long seminar. Because I always had to burn the midnight oil and sit down
on
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 my table revising and reviewing my knowledge for exams, walking activities would be a great way to recharge my energy again. We walked
during
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 2 hours along the street to the park. We tried to maintain a slow speed to keep stamina. At the same
time
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 we talked and share a lot of fun stories. It made our journey very fast. At
this
time
, parks sparkled in the sunlight and we take the opportunity to enjoy the picturesque scenery. Both of them
was
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 thirsty so we bought some water with a little bit
money
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 and ate
cupcakes
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 we prepared at home. After that, we came back home and rested in peace.
This
 day filled me with great delight because of the beautiful and relaxing
time
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 much money.
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